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Sensory

Posted on January 15, 2012 by Raivenne

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You like that don’t you?

It wasn’t a question.

The scent of them
Permeates the air.

Their ragged breaths
Ripping
The silence.

Her hot naked back
Shoved
Onto the cool rough wall.

Tasting her
Wetness
On his lips.

Eyes wide open
In the stark pitch black.

She answers anyway.

Yes sir, please!

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dVerse ~ Poets Pub
dVerse Meeting the Bar: Imagism

42 thoughts on “Sensory”

girlgriot on January 15, 2012 at 10:30 AM said:

Oh my. There’s a good start to my Sunday morning!

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- Raivenne on January 15, 2012 at 11:35 AM said:
  
  Whaaaaat? * bats lashes innocently *
  
  Thanks GG. 😉
  
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heavenlyimaginings on January 15, 2012 at 10:33 AM said:

oh my is right, you are Amazingly talented at creating word images

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- Raivenne on January 15, 2012 at 11:37 AM said:
  
  Why thank you, HI.
  
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charlesmashburn on January 15, 2012 at 10:44 AM said:

Beautifully vivid and sensual, Raivenne! Nice!

http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2012/01/13/dearest-wife-2/

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- Raivenne on January 15, 2012 at 11:37 AM said:
  
  Glad you enjoyed Charles. Thanks.
  
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  - charlesmashburn on January 19, 2012 at 6:35 PM said:
    
    I gave this imagism a try. What do you think?
    
    http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2012/01/19/black-words/
Cerridwen on January 17, 2012 at 8:55 PM said:

I was not anticipating that! lol But it wasn’t unwelcome, either. ;op

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- Raivenne on January 19, 2012 at 6:27 PM said:
  
  Surprise! * Big smile *
  
  Thanks Cerridwen.
  
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Snowflakes on January 18, 2012 at 3:38 PM said:

great read.

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- Raivenne on January 19, 2012 at 6:27 PM said:
  
  Thanks Snowflakes.
  
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claudia on January 19, 2012 at 3:26 PM said:

oh goodness yes…i like that… off to cool down a bit…smiles

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- Raivenne on January 19, 2012 at 6:28 PM said:
  
  * turns on hose *
  
  Thanks Claudia
  
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Laurie Kolp on January 19, 2012 at 3:39 PM said:

Whew…this evokes much more than just images… great piece!

http://lkkolp.wordpress.com/2012/01/19/the-rubber-band/

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- Raivenne on January 19, 2012 at 6:29 PM said:
  
  * swings hose from Claudia to Laurie *
  
  Thanks Laurie!
  
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zongrik on January 19, 2012 at 3:57 PM said:

LOL, when u started it “it wasn’t a question” i was immediately thinking about the answer, and you supplied that, well, in a poetic sense you did.

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- Raivenne on January 19, 2012 at 6:30 PM said:
  
  Glad you enjoyed it, thanks.
  
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tashtoo on January 19, 2012 at 3:59 PM said:

That was fantastic…and certainly sensory! (said the Big White Woman) 🙂 You were definitely able to stir up some images within my imagination! And, if your’re interested in knowing more about me…and you know you are…you can check out mine http://www.tashtoo.com/2012/01/meeting-bar-open.html

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- Raivenne on January 19, 2012 at 6:34 PM said:
  
  * truly laughing out loud *
  
  Glad to know some folks actually do read that mini-bio thing.
  Thanks for comment (and the giggles).
  
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Gay Reiser Cannon on January 19, 2012 at 5:14 PM said:

The tactile, sensory package in one. Yet we do see them, don’t we? Almost from the inside out.
Well done.

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- Raivenne on January 19, 2012 at 6:36 PM said:
  
  “Yet we do see them, don’t we?” Yes, in the oddest way we really do.
  
  Thank you!
  
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hobgoblin2011 on January 19, 2012 at 7:56 PM said:

Really nice job here. The poem sandwiched in between the question and the answer is perfect. Well done. Thanks

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- Raivenne on January 20, 2012 at 10:04 AM said:
  
  Thank you.
  
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brian on January 19, 2012 at 9:50 PM said:

well i need to go take a shower now…good answer…ha…and love what comes in between…hot write…

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- Raivenne on January 20, 2012 at 10:05 AM said:
  
  * giggles * Thanks Brian.
  
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pandamoniumcat on January 19, 2012 at 11:11 PM said:

Brilliant…!

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- Raivenne on January 20, 2012 at 10:06 AM said:
  
  Thank you!
  
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Charles (@shralec) on January 19, 2012 at 11:34 PM said:

Now that’s an image I understand! Very sensuous.

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- Raivenne on January 20, 2012 at 10:08 AM said:
  
  Am I going to have to turn on the hose again?
  
  Thanks Charles.
  
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David King on January 20, 2012 at 4:07 AM said:

More of the same might be in order here.

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- Raivenne on January 20, 2012 at 10:08 AM said:
  
  Is that an order? 😉
  
  Thanks David.
  
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Victoria C. Slotto on January 20, 2012 at 4:23 PM said:

Delicious involvement of the senses, Raivenne. Thanks for sharing this one.

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- Raivenne on January 22, 2012 at 11:26 AM said:
  
  Thank you and you’re welcome.
  
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Shawna on January 20, 2012 at 7:01 PM said:

What a great intro:

“You like that don’t you?
It wasn’t a question.”

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- Raivenne on January 22, 2012 at 11:28 AM said:
  
  Yeah, I have to admit I grinned when it came to me. Thanks Shawna.
  
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magher1 on January 23, 2012 at 11:55 AM said:

Sensual and humorous… Perfect mixture!

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- Raivenne on January 23, 2012 at 6:11 PM said:
  
  Humorous? Okaaay…
  
  Thanks, Magher1
  
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Cherlyn on January 25, 2012 at 8:38 AM said:

Wow – that’s pretty hot. I think that’s a question everyone’s been asked “You like that don’t you”? teehee. Great work, loved this poem – thanks for sharing!

Here’s mine for the rally: http://cursemymetalbody.wordpress.com/2012/01/19/poetry-thursday-74/

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- Raivenne on January 27, 2012 at 9:16 AM said:
  
  Yep, that is a popular question and almost always the person inquiring already knows the answer 😉
  
  Thanks Cherlyn
  
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bajanpoet on January 26, 2012 at 1:37 PM said:

I’m shivering….. damn …. you made me hot and amorous in one go…..

This poem was written SO WELL… the picture was vivid, the emotions and sensuality on point…

*breathing hard*

I love it…..

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- Raivenne on January 27, 2012 at 9:20 AM said:
  
  “I’m shivering”
  
  ” *breathing hard* ”
  
  You like that don’t don’t you? 😉
  
  Thanks Bajan
  
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  - bajanpoet on January 27, 2012 at 1:10 PM said:
    
    You know the answer…. 😉 LOL

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