I look upon this cloudy scene
The miles of dark unbroken gray
Stretched to the limits of my sight
As sky turns to sinister mood
What would have been, for sure will not
The lightning strike is close and loud
To emphasize its full intent
Like it or not, it’s understood
That any plans are now for moot
I lay the blame on the storming shroud
Their malice to ruin the day
As if the blame would do much good
I sneak a smile at the dark clouds
Didn’t want to go out anyway
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National Poetry Writing Month 2016 – Day 2
Today’s form is a new one for me – the Bref Double.
The Bref Double has four stanzas – 3 quatrains (4-line stanzas) and 1 couplet (or 2-line stanza). It carries three rhymes, an A rhyme, B rhyme, and C rhyme. There is no set line length, but the lines should be consistent within each poem. The order of the rhyme varies, but the A and B rhymes must appear twice within the first 3 stanzas and once each in the couplet, while the C rhyme is the final line in each of the quatrains.
Rhymes can be as follows: xaxc xbxc xbac ba, xabc xxxc xabc ab, abxc abxc xxxc ab, xabc xaxc xbxc ab etc.
Ha. I love the suppressed resentment here–very cleverly done! k.
Like K, I like love the sneer that runs through the lines. And I love the imagery. You paint a sky that makes anyone seeing it, think, No wonder you didn’t want to go!.
I sneak a smile at the dark clouds
I didn’t want to go out anyway…. : ) love it.
Wow! You had me at the opening lines.
Beautifully done.
Those clouds provided a perfect excuse. 🙂
The bref double is a very useful form and you use it superbly.
I love the pouting wants-to-be-a-tantrum statement at the end. 🙂 You tell ’em, girl. Make your OWN fun as much as you can.