26 comments on “Winded

  1. oh dang…lost your dinner..ha that is a danger at picnics…when the wind blows…
    we had a derecho a few years ago…to see it coming and the destruction it left..
    that was massive…

  2. Well the ending was unexpected, smiles ~ I admire how the wind can change landscape and craggy topography ~ Nice, I like the word zephr ~

  3. This is so very charming–I am a big sucker for the kinds of heat waves you describe–I find them so fascinating to find in the air–and then so funny to have it be on a plate–very clever and got a big smile here–thanks! k.

    • LOL! Something about that zephyr travelling over mounds of picnic foods instead mounds of earth does change the tone entirely, no? Thanks Björn!

  4. Ha, you got me there – I wasn’t expecting that! And that’s why my boys don’t enjoy picnics very much (and all those insects too). Charming and very creative.

  5. I’m a bit dull, so your explanatory note at the end made me re-read the poem in light of the real meaning. THEN, it was fun. Prior to that, I thought it was just going to be yet another flowery poem about wind. It was great.

    I would appreciate a hint a little earlier in the poem so that I don’t have to read it over again. Just a thought. I my last poem on wind, now that I think of it, I should have told more up front too, perhaps.

    • I thought about an earlier hint, but felt it diluted the full impact of the reveal at the end. I realize some may miss the “joke”, as you had, but as most seem to get it, so I thought it worth the risk. I’m happy you did enjoy it once you got it. Thanks Sabio.

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