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Knowing

Posted on August 17, 2012 by Raivenne

Knowing you would be there for me

I laughed at your loving transgress

The proud boasting soliloquy

Of forever you would profess

Too long it took me to assess

All I feel now with abundance

And words I’m ready to express

Now fall on your heart of silence

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dVerse Poets Pub – FormForAll – Huitain

16 thoughts on “Knowing”

Bob Sklar on August 17, 2012 at 8:31 AM said:

…Now fall on your heart of silence.

Whether this refers to death or indifference, very sad.

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- Raivenne on August 17, 2012 at 9:16 AM said:
  
  Very true – thanks Bob.
  
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Annette Mickelson on August 17, 2012 at 11:17 AM said:

Reminds me of Scarlett O’Hara…

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- Raivenne on August 17, 2012 at 12:07 PM said:
  
  HAHAHAHA! Oh wow, good example!!
  
  Thanks Annette
  
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hypercryptical on August 17, 2012 at 2:04 PM said:

Oh sad (but wonderful) stuff Raivenne.

Anna :o]

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- Raivenne on August 18, 2012 at 9:25 PM said:
  
  Thank you, Anna.
  
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Gay Reiser Cannon on August 17, 2012 at 2:13 PM said:

When emotions and love change places perhaps – like the layering of time, meanings, and emotion here. So well and succinctly expressed in this well executed short form!

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- Raivenne on August 18, 2012 at 9:26 PM said:
  
  * curtsies * Thanks Gay!
  
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Gemma Wiseman on August 17, 2012 at 5:49 PM said:

That word of “silence” symbolises a powerful full stop in your poem! A sad situation!

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- Raivenne on August 18, 2012 at 9:30 PM said:
  
  Sometimes things come to a full stop. Thanks Gemma.
  
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brian on August 17, 2012 at 5:53 PM said:

dfe sad..i really like that last line…you did really well with the form…

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- Raivenne on August 18, 2012 at 9:27 PM said:
  
  * curtsies * Thank you!
  
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Patti on August 17, 2012 at 7:36 PM said:

You really mastered the form. This reads so beautifully, like a song.

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- Raivenne on August 18, 2012 at 9:31 PM said:
  
  II don’t know about mastered, but thank you!
  
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Daydreamer on August 18, 2012 at 5:01 PM said:

Deep and heartfelt!

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- Raivenne on August 18, 2012 at 9:28 PM said:
  
  Thanks DayDreamer.
  
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