18 comments on “I Imagine A Day

  1. Raivenne,

    No, you’re not the only one. The world will survive as long as there are at least a few of us to balance out all the “company (wo)man” types. Beautiful – keep it up!

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  3. it’s good to not only have those dreams but to work for their realization as well…trying to make the world a better place by what we do and how we act…cool how you managed to keep the song feel throughout the whole poem

  4. nice…first, i love the song choice…lennon…dreams take work, something that i think many forget and they will waste away waiting on something they could have had, if only….much like we often give the nod to things that might improve our world, or wear the t-shirt but….well writ ma’am

  5. This is excellent … and what a challenge. Some powerful lines here such as: ‘Pieces of my soul I imagine crying/ With the all senseless lying ..

  6. What an inspired choice of writer to honour and to weave your poem around – and to impose upon yourself an added framework of rhyme, that is just confidence of the highest order in your craft! John Lennon’s words are wondrously idealistic, but it is that very idealism that makes his vision so compelling and so inspirational. You take that theme and explore it to the fullest, drawing the reader through all the nuances and consequences of the dream.

  7. .I agree with Sam that John Lennon’s words are wondrously idealistic – and what an ideal! Tis my hope that one day the world will be as one but doubt that it will be realised, for in essence we all follow the company line…

    Anna :o]

  8. I could hear the song here….as if listening to an inner voice belting out lines from behind the scene, as undertones to the actual lines. To work towards dreams is idealistic in perceptions closer to the dreamer and why not join them!

  9. Oh, lovely choice of cabeza. I am impressed with all the neat rhyming in your glosa in addition to the required rhymes.

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