23 comments on “Better Plans

  1. A bang on, sterling triolet; my favorite so far today. The refrain alterations are smooth, and it cleaves to the happy message very well. Love poems can be saccharine, but yours is heart warming.

  2. I like the progression in your triolet, Raivenne, which is a difficult feat in a short poem, the way it begins on a wistful note and ends so hopefully. I particularly like the way it turns on the lines:
    ‘Hard as the bedrock yet soft as a glove
    That such love could be returned you see’.

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