For While She Weeps

 

For while she weeps,
Sorrow keeps as
pain sweeps her heart.
Torn apart as
it thwarts the chance
to romance the
soul’s dance that’s stilled.
Passions killed by
tears spilled in ache.
Spirit breaks. It’s
a snake that crawls,
As it sprawls there
then squalls and rails
driving nails, it
assails heart’s halls.
But it falls hard
Soon all hurts slow.
Pain will go, and
she’ll know – she’s free.

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This is a Than Bauk form.

The Than-Bauk is a three line “climbing rhyme” poem of Burmese origin. Conventionally a witty saying or epigram, it’s even shorter than a haiku, but a lot more structured. Each Than-Bauk is three lines of four syllables each with the rhyme on the fourth, third and second syllables of each line respectively.

O. O. O. a.
O. O. a. O.
O. a. O. O.

Than-Bauks can be chained together to form a longer poem where the last syllable of the third line starts the rhyme of the next…

O. O. O. a.
O. O. a. O.
O. a. O. b.
O. O. b. O.
O. b. O. c.
O. O. c. O.
O. c. O. etc.

or you can “staircase” them…

O. O. O. a.
O. O. a. O.
O. a. O. b.
 

O. O. O. b.
O. O. b. O.
O. b. O. c. 

O. O. O. c.
O. O. c. O.
O. c. O. etc.

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14 thoughts on “For While She Weeps

  1. Love this. Also would love to have you host an article on the form in the future for FormForAll. Would you be interested? Let me know – gaycannon@yahoo.com. Plenty of time to decide but it’s an interesting new form to me and I love how it feels so internal and external with the rhyme scheme turning throughout. Very musical!

  2. Wow..I love this form…yet another one that I’m unfamiliar with…but like the tight rhyme scheme internally placed. Yes, pain usually does subside so we can once again be free from its all-encompassing clutches.

    • I enjoy trying new forms, especially short ones like this that go against the grain of my verbose nature.

      Glad you enjoyed the form and the write, Bodhirose – thanks.

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