I awaken and start the day anew
I wish to shout for joy, but it won’t be
this piece of hell that’s become me and you
It’s simply washed all joy away from me
I wish to shout for joy, but it won’t be
With caution is how I now must behave
It’s simply washed all joy away from me
The gallant now replaced with the depraved
With caution is how I now must behave
I’m just as much his virgin as his vamp
The gallant now replaced with the depraved
A dexterous mixture of coy and tramp
I’m just as much his virgin as his vamp
Some elder ring of hell has been released
A dexterous mixture of coy and tramp
My “once upon a time’ prince now deceased
Some elder ring of hell has been released
To wallow in these sins he does impel
My “once upon a time’ prince now deceased
Like fairy tales my mother used to tell
To wallow in these sins he does impel
I join in things I once never conceived
Like fairy tales my mother used to tell
I‘m awed by all I’ve been lead to believe
I join in things I once never conceived
My mind and soul warped so far out of joint
I ‘m awed by all I’ve been lead to believe
Until I’m pushed beyond the breaking point
My mind and soul warped so far out of joint
I hushed the urge of fighting brevity
Until I’m pushed beyond the breaking point
I fought for my peace and longevity
I pushed the urge of wanting brevity
This piece of hell that’s become me and you
I fought for my peace and longevity
I awaken and start the day anew
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WOW. Excellently done. 🙂
Thank you, Bajan.
love this, reminds me of a Villanelle … what is the form? It is beautiful!
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http://magicinthebackyard.wordpress.com/2012/01/25/gladys-cherry-survivor/
This form is called a Pantoum. I have a link to how it is done following the poem. You’re right it is very much like a Villanelle in style..
Wow! Great job on the very interesting form! Awesome storytelling, too!
Thanks Charles! The Pantoum is not among my favorites, but I do like the results.
enthusiastic energy in your words,
well penned entry.
Happy Rally.
Its a very good pantoum.
In my country we called Pantun, and yours here is cross pantoum.
Love it.
snap..your opening stanza really sets the tone of the piece and you hold it well…full of emotion and ugh…a really hard place to be….
Thank you, Brian.
One of the most unique pantoums I’ve read tonight, and bravo for taking the form as far as you did. With so many stanzas, you had time to allow the theme has time to explore its depth of meaning, to let the story play out.
Hah! My tendency to be verbose worked well for this then.
Thanks Samuel.
Really enjoyed this…it did lead us in a story…a tragic feeling story.
Rarely, is there triumph without tragedy.
Thank you Bhodirose
ugh…that hurts…pushed beyond the breaking point… felt write and great job on the form as well
Sometimes bending is not enough and one has to break to rebuild.
Thank you Claudia.
You definitely worked the form perfectly, told a story that tugged at the heart. Enjoyed!
Thank you, Mary.
Utterly compelling ~ what a fab poem ~ suspense throughout ~ nice write ~ great read
Great poem… the third stanza is my favorite, leading to “A dexterous mixture of coy and tramp”, I like how you use your words.