I had watched
In waning sunlight
How it reflected
In soft contours
As one sun
And yet another
In each watery stream
Until in darkness
I walk away
Too cowardly to admit
Am the cause
Of those tears
dVerse Poets Pub | Quadrille #132: Your Poem Theme: Stream
At dVerse, De Jackson, aka WhimsyGizmo, hosts bar for Quadrille Monday, where we are challenged to pen a poem of precisely 44 words (not counting the title), that must include the weekly word prompt. This weeks prompt: Stream
Oooo! I like where those last lines took this!
The “one sun becoming another” is mesmerizing. I read this poem at least 4 times. ❤
Why thank you.
I read it 5 times 😉
Just kidding – not sure how many times I read it – but it got better each time!
Hah! Thanks, David.
Oh my. This one packs a punch. Nicely done poem.
Thank you, Arcadia Maria.
the poem flows so lyrically into that end point of recrimination
Well done. Blunt and quickly confessed.
I could stare at those lips for hours … sorry you were the cause of his tears. Cheers.
Oh my heart this is incredibly hard-hitting and poignant! 💝💝
Thank you, Sanaa!
wow, that’s really strong.
What a powerful visual you conjure with your words. I think it hurts worst when we hurt another that we care about.
Very, very true, Lisa.
When we hurt the ones we love we also damage ourselves. Beautifully put!
That is very much the truth. Thanks Ingrid.