My sin? The thing tabu?
Her white shoulders scented
Of the English leather and saddle soap
Of her recent ride
She was an ambush to my senses
A charlie horse upon my heart
Who knew she’d be my opium?
My sin, the thing tabu
Sprawled as languidly
In the warm hayloft
As she would be
upon cool white linen
This beautiful romantica
From days of yore
My sin, the thing tabu
Remade as my obsession
In the tumultuous now
One who now beckons
Just behind the red door
Her dulcet voice
My sin, the thing tabu
An allure as powerful
as any mythological siren
In the insolence of her love
She is my midnight poison
Borne of diamonds
Held aloft in indigo skies
The secrets untold of
My sin, the thing tabu
I now reveal.
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Tonight at dVerse our pubtender Lillian challenges to use our noodles with famous brand names from three provided categories: Candy Bars, Perfumes or Cereals
The poem can be any form and any length you prefer, but it must utilize only one of the categories above. And it must include the word/words of at least two of the brands within that list used as regular words. Overachiever that I am I chose Perfumes.
My Sin
Tabu
White Shoulders
English Leather
Ambush
Charlie
Opium
White Linen
Beautiful
Romantica
Obsession
Red Door
Allure
Insolence
Midnight Poison
Diamonds
Untold
Reveal
Other than the repeating line, all of the above perfumes are in the the poem in the order listed.
dVerse ~Poets Pub | Poetry Prompts
Brand Name Noodling
Raivenne-lations 
Isn’t it funny how the words set the tone for what gets written? Most of the perfume ones are sensual, a little dark. Love this.
Yes, I’m starting the read some of the others. Words like “allure” and “obsession” will do that.
Thanks, De.
Nice lines: “She is my midnight poison
Borne of diamonds”
Thank you.
Grrrr….internet connection going in and out with these DC storms. Trying again:
So effective to repeat the title within the poem…an excellent refrain. And a so clever use of “Charlie.”
Especially love these lines
“Her dulcet voice
My sin, the thing tabu
An allures as powerful
as any mythological siren”
So very well done. So glad you posted to the prompt!
Thank you, Lillian.
I loved this! You did a spectacular job! Loved the Charlie horse of the heart! Great work!!
Dwight
Thank you Dwight!
The repetition is effective, like a trail of perfume through your poem.. I enjoyed the sound and rhythm of the lines:
‘Sprawled as languidly
In the warm hayloft
As she would be
upon cool white linen’
and
‘Remade as my obsession
In the tumultuous now’
and the imagery in:
‘Borne of diamonds
Held aloft in indigo skies’.
“…like a trail of perfume through your poem…”
Thanks kim881, that is exactly what I was going for.
Oh yes… perfumes lend themselves to passionate writing.
Thanks Björn. Yes, they really do.
You did so well with the prompt. Very cool.
Thank you, Sherry Blue Sky.
I had noted to Bjorn on his post, that this is a wonderful prompt idea – and I think you’ve done an excellent job with it too. I think the repetition is well suited and I like how you’ve allowed the list, as presented, dictate how you chose to write the poem. It adds a certain structure within it, while you’ve managed to make the words work for themselves, but within a logical fashion that flows seamlessly as a story. This is well done. And if not reading/knowing this was a specific word list? Well, it’s just this well fashioned that there is no jarring word out of place.
I particularly like this slightly “old world” tone and then this stanza, which brings us right into the “now” of the writer’s/ ghost-poet’s “now”
This beautiful romantica
From days of yore
My sin, the thing tabu
Remade as my obsession
In the tumultuous now
it’s all very intimate! it sparkles
Why thank you, willow88switches for the lovely comment.
your welcome