9 comments on “Fall In Defeat

  1. Awww, I can understand the gloom… beautifully captured – and the repetition gives that seasonal feel – autumn coming round again, yet another leaf falling, another chilly day. Good use of alliteration as well.

  2. You paint such a clear picture of November. It’s fortunate for you that the leaves have fallen before snow comes. Ours came before autumn had finished its work and the weight of the snow along with the leaves broke off so many tree branches and even took down trees. Lovely descriptions.

  3. You have drawn a very clear picture of the changes taking place at this time of year! One day beautiful color and within a short time bleak and bare. Really a thoughtfully penned poem.

  4. Black leafalls now
    on concrete streets
    moods risEn..
    concrete
    bottom
    grain
    last
    sand
    heArt
    unglue
    together..
    what comes next..
    concrete crack..
    sprout peaks
    just
    above
    last
    whole
    depth..
    riSinGonce
    agaIn.. graIn
    sAnd now liVes..
    sparKLinGleam..:)

  5. A great piece of earth.. One question, where’s the little fluffy, Rabid squirrel —Smile— You do write within the lines and paint beautiful pictures.
    Michael

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