Fall In Defeat

There's a tree-lined block
    I walk through almost daily
        A week ago awash in the vibrant hues of fall 
There's a tree-lined block
    I walk through almost daily
        Now there’s little hint of autumn at all 
Today gnarled gray fingers claw
    At dark clouded slate skies
        In quiet desperation holding on
Today gnarled gray fingers claw
    At dark cloud-dotted slate skies
        Their gold and ruby jewels nearly gone
In the ever shortening daylight of autumn
    I watch one such jewel lazily drift
        It felt as if watching a tear fall in defeat
In the ever shortening daylight of autumn
    I watch one such jewel lazily drift 
        To its final resting upon the concrete
The darkening slate skies
    Matching the charcoal streets
        A hint of winter's chill viewed
The darkening slate skies
    Matching the charcoal streets
        And my worsening mood

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Feeling the first hints of winter’s chill this week is not making for a happy Raivenne.  Missing Victoria’s weather prompt for Poetics by an hour, didn’t help, so I’m feeding two birds with this one.

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9 thoughts on “Fall In Defeat

  1. Awww, I can understand the gloom… beautifully captured – and the repetition gives that seasonal feel – autumn coming round again, yet another leaf falling, another chilly day. Good use of alliteration as well.

  2. You paint such a clear picture of November. It’s fortunate for you that the leaves have fallen before snow comes. Ours came before autumn had finished its work and the weight of the snow along with the leaves broke off so many tree branches and even took down trees. Lovely descriptions.

  3. You have drawn a very clear picture of the changes taking place at this time of year! One day beautiful color and within a short time bleak and bare. Really a thoughtfully penned poem.

  4. Black leafalls now
    on concrete streets
    moods risEn..
    concrete
    bottom
    grain
    last
    sand
    heArt
    unglue
    together..
    what comes next..
    concrete crack..
    sprout peaks
    just
    above
    last
    whole
    depth..
    riSinGonce
    agaIn.. graIn
    sAnd now liVes..
    sparKLinGleam..:)

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