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Remember

Posted on August 14, 2015 by Raivenne

Within your hearts abode
                  a code
The slices of our past
              can last
Simple joys to not perish
              but cherish
Go on and  reminisce
               since
You hold the key
             see?
There will be your smile
                  awhile
Within the territory
             memory
             glory
              me

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9 thoughts on “Remember”

Glenn Buttkus on August 14, 2015 at 5:04 PM said:

Remembrances can be bitter-sweet/joyful-sad, but you are right on as to the key; but, of course we ,can encounter memory triggers along the way. Nice choices for echoes.

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Sanaa Rizvi on August 14, 2015 at 5:49 PM said:

Love your choice of echoes. Beautifully penned 🙂

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katiemiafrederick on August 14, 2015 at 7:30 PM said:

Genetic memory Cold
Sold
Truth not often told
Bold
Present Force no form
Born..:)

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lynn__ on August 14, 2015 at 8:22 PM said:

I like how final line echoes back in triplicate…like a real echo (and memory) might!

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Sumana Roy on August 14, 2015 at 11:21 PM said:

fond memories truly are for cherishing and reliving…nicely echoed…

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Abhra on August 15, 2015 at 1:57 AM said:

Beautiful memories…

You hold the key
see?
There will be your smile
awhile

I love this.

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Björn Rudberg (brudberg) on August 15, 2015 at 4:48 AM said:

The reverb in those three lines… Like the fading echo. Love that innovation.

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Mary on August 15, 2015 at 2:26 PM said:

Well penned.

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Gabriella on August 20, 2015 at 2:03 PM said:

Memories are definitely two-edged. I like the innovation on the echo at the end.

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