Boom
This ache
That was caused
Surprised me so
Eyes the color of irises in bloom
Seen from a glance across a crowded room
I should have known
’twas the start
Of my
Doom
Fell
So hard
that is what
I truly did
I wish someone had rung a warning bell
His lips upon mine had not chance to tell
That loving him
Totally
Would be
Hell
Blend
Is what
We had hopes
For both our folks
we knew for a while it would be pretend
but in time hands of true warmth would extend
Jules and I knew
it’d be good
in the
end
Blessed
is the
One thing that
We’d never be
His folks would rather take knife to my breast
And my folks held him in equal detest
Who would have thought
Parents could
Be so
Stressed?
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Using the Double Tetractys form to give modern twist on a classic Willie Shakes tale.
Raivenne-lations 
Families! And I think you words are very good!
Kind regards
Anna :o]
Superb and I love the structure to this also, most appealing to the eyes and reading, Poppy.
Love your spin on Ro and Jules…poor kids!
Much like the etheree, I love the play on Shakespeare and the tragedy of lost love.
Incredible structure of writing. My favorite style of writing.
My favorite lines by you: we knew for a while it would be pretend
but in time hands of true warmth would extend
So moving and poetically harmonic. 🙂
I like this take on Romeo and Juliet and the structure is wonderful.
It’s true, you marry the family too. There’s no way around it. Hope it works out, thanks
Ah there is much truth in this piece.
The form is quite visual, and the message is strong. It entertains the senses. It reaches the heart.
Such an incredible play upon words and it has such a heart stirring effect ❤ love this.
Interesting use of shape in the telling of the tale…
Who would have thought
Parents could
Be so
Stressed?
A great summary of R&J — whether intended or no — A+. Your poem is fun and well thought out.
Interesting form.
This is one of those times when ‘like’ is a frustrating click. LOVE! The form is marvelously done and any time you connect to the Bard, you get my attention. Half way through reading I knew it must be R&J. (Having taught it so many times, it dwells in my mind.) The visual of the form plays so well with the underlying themes of the play. Standing ovation!!!
Thank you Jillys!