Oh so cold | my soul breaks
Your sweet warming touch | slick shards that shatter though my heart
Now fills with trepidation | the shrapnel of all your lies
Where it was once welcomed most fondly | leaves me with harsh truths
Breaks my soul | oh so cold
The “Tonequain” is a poetic form created invented by Tony Meade. It is based on the classic cinquain form, then breaks it by adding an extra syllable to each line, giving a five-line poem with lines of 3, 5, 7, 9 and 3 syllables in that order. In addition where the classic has strict use of iambs, because of the odd number of syllables you cannot write an iambic poem in this form (you could try writing in dactyls, amphibrachs and/or anapaests if you want). You are free from of the iambic tyranny!
You can reverse the order of the lines, write a two stanza poem where the form of the stanzas mirror each other, or you could write a garland or even a coronet.
I had a little fun here where I wrote two Tonequains side by side. The first in 3, 5, 7, 9, 3 syllable order, the second in reverse with a 3, 9, 7, 5, 3 order. Each a Tonequin on its own, together creating a Super Tone if you will.
dVerse ~ Poets Pub | Meeting The Bar : The Cinquain … Expanded
Very clever variation; I like it … smiles
I’m with Tony. Very clever take on the prompt!
Very creative! I found myself reading it forward and backward and all at once and in halves. Peace, Linda
That’s so clever, and they work beautifully together and apart.
Way cool! I like it too!
What a great way of playing with the form.. Like a jigsaw puzzle where you can read the poem in all possible ways. A little bit like a Rubik’s cube.
Well done! Like it – a lot.