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So readily you sway to my sweet wile
And though we warn believe not all you see
I gaze at you enchanted by your smile
We tell each other truths to some degree
Yet in those truths we bury many lies
The veil well-worn over hypocrisy
Secure in all the ways that we devise
To keep our sadness hidden it is true
We smile and laugh, knowing it for disguise
But yet the truth does find ways to seep through
When the façade finally starts to fall
We’ll pay the piper with the penance due
The cold and bitter truth has come to call
That this marriage is over after all
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Trying my hand at a Terza Rima Sonnet for dVerse
dVerse Poets Pub | Form for All : Terza Rima and Terza Rima Sonnet
oh true the truth finds a way to leek through…and there is def a price to pay….nice…the second stanza really took off for me and really nice close with the warning…i like…smiles.
Yes the truth always will find a way… Thanks as always Brian.
Clever poem, the way you play hide and seek with words here.
The inns and outs of false communication when finally the truth will out.
Thank you Aprille.
Very well written, and the end just chilling.
Will pay the piper’s with the penance due
Great one.
There’s always a price that must be paid. Thanks Björn.
have to get in line after Björn – the piper did it to me, too… wonderful line!
beautiful and sad one, Raivenne… well done.
Thank you. Miriam.
Lovely work on the form . I specially like this part:
But yet the truth does find ways to seep through
When the façade finally starts to fall
We’ll pay the piper with the penance due
So sad in the ending ~
Yeah, that’s my favorite stanza in this as well. Thanks Heaven.
Oh, that ending…truly unexpected, but very well penned!
Thanks Mary, I do like my unexpected twists.
I didn’t anticipate the punch of the ending – felt it though!
Oh those sucker punches huh? Thanks Rowan.
As others have said, that poem has the venom of a scorpion’s sting at the end of the tail – a twist well-hidden in the terza rima craft.
That’s one heck of a sting. Thank you Samuel.
i love the image of the piper in this… the truth leaking through…there are things that can be hidden for a while but eventually the facade falls cause at one point we’re no longer strong enough to keep it upright…ugh…tough write
It was a surprisingly easy write given the harsh subject. Thanks Claudia.
Overall this is a beautiful but sad poem. Your use of rhyme is excellent, and your meter is tight. This line made me stumble though:
Yet in those the truths we bury many lies.
If you remove “the” then the stresses fall more naturally. Don’t worry about leaving only nine syllables; most readers will include an extra one by pausing.
The turn this took was unexpected too; a real sting in the tail.
Oops, I stumbled as well. I was deciding between ‘the’ and ‘those’ and missed deleting the word ‘the’ from that line. It does not make sense with both words. Considering how much I I generally fail at iambs I am extremely happy on how well this one worked out. Thanks so much Tony!
Very sad to live like this but how often it happens, as others have said a sad sonnet so beautifully written.
Nicely done…’sway to your sweet wile’ is beginning that draws us in.
Very impressive use of the form. Interesting subject matter.
A superb write and I too did not anticipate the ending. Brava.
Anna :o]