35 comments on “Orphan

  1. dang…i was an orphan ever before it was a fact…a breathtaking close…so much emotions roiling in me after reading this as well…ugh….what a hard life….well writ…you made me feel it…

  2. Sometimes memories hold all our sadness, only protection is here and now. I don’t know if anyone ever said, “I’m sorry to you, but I would like to, say it now.” No one should have those memories as their own.

  3. Tough write indeed and I understand the final stanza. How could you love him if you received no love from him…much admiration for your honest words.

    Anna :o]

  4. Good riddance to bad rubbish!!
    Its a very small world. This is a terrific piece about bad fathers [and mothers] and is in direct tandem of what I am about to post myself. Some memoreis of childhood are not worth the effort it takes to remember them. I am empathise with you throughout this, I feel the anguish and pain like it were my own, probably because it was.
    If I prayed, I would, but I dont. But you are not alone. Lets not give the bastards the satisfaction of dwelling upon bad times, lets look forward to the great times our futures will bring.

  5. Ugh – sadly, this happens more often than many of us care to admit. This is a well-written poem – very hard to read, full of strong images and emotions.

    • ” this happens more often than many of us care to admit.”
      For all the ones too scare or unable to admit/talk about it; that is the frightening part. Thank you Tony..

  6. Heartbreaking and wonderful poem. I like how you are able to express some forgiveness in the poem in a way that was believable and didn’t “make everything okay.” The speaker of this poem is someone that I would like to know (although the mother in me does just want to take her home and protect her.) I like how you were able to draw those repsonses in me. Lovely read.

    • Sometimes you just can’t “make everything okay” and still be honest. I’m now a little old to be taken home and protected, but I thank you for the sentiment.
      As I said to Brian above, that my words can draw these responses means I’ve done my job. Thank you, Heidi.

    • Oh the good dads are out there Gretchen. There are far too many good people in the world for all of them to have learned from bad examples. If we ever meet, I’ll take you up on that offer 😉
      Thanks Gretchen.

  7. ouch…nothing time could heal…you did not deserve that and I’m glad you seem to be at peace with it now..especially after writing about it 😉 So hard..

  8. The final two lines sum it all up completely, but

    I simply
    never wished him to hell

    says so much about you. You should be very proud of the fact that you can say that – and of a fine, fine poem into the bargain.It is full of true feeling. Thanks for it.

    • I haven’t really thought much about that line. It was telling a truth, that I sometimes blame, sometimes thank my Christian upbringing.
      Thank you David.

  9. If this is true, you and I were cut from the same cloth. Some differences–Mom is still with us, but he is gone, and I did not go to his funeral–but otherwise, your experience is very similar to mine.
    Excellent write, Raivenne. The painful truth can be turned into beauty.

    • If only this were not true, Charles. Quite a few of us were cut from this cloth. A handful of us come through it to turn pain into beauty.

      Thank you Charles.

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